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The cold fall air bites my skin
As the day falls into night
I had left for good this time
Running towards the light

They don't know what I'm feeling
As I run away
Trying to put everything behind me
They were never here to stay

Trying to forget my past
Sweet 16 oh how untrue
I've lived my life to the fullest
But all I ever wanted was you

I see you as I'm running
You're standing in the street
I try to slow before you
But I just can't stop my feet

You make no attempt to stop me
Putting your head down in shame
I look back to see you calling
Someone elses name

The cool fall air bites my skin
As the day falls oh to fast
I run into my future
To try to forget...
My past.....
©2004-2009 ~Miracle-Oceans
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Author's Comments

Well this is what you get when I'm in business class and I get bored. This has a back story that goes along with something that happened to me last year but I wont get into that. I hope you enjoy it.

-Miracle

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~Exodus-2220 Jan 24, 2004, 4:53:38 PM
Oh man, that poem really shows how you felt. You obviously have a very awesome talent for putting into words how you feel. Keep up the good work. I really liked this poem.

><> Exodus-2220 <><

Revelations 22:20- He who testifies to these things says, "Yes, I am coming soon."
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~tranqxility Feb 13, 2004, 10:45:09 PM
you did a nice job of portraying your feelings in this work... it's a simple work, but does have it's minor complexities...(it reminds me of how I wrote a few years ago).. it gets sad towards the middle.. and moreso towards the end where everything just falls off to an abrupt end.. good work.. (and I'm not particularly fond of rhyming poetry)
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~HateToLove Feb 15, 2004, 8:58:05 AM
i espically liked the sweet 16 oh so untrue.
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~anticrombie666 Apr 6, 2004, 6:29:29 AM
i always liked that poem joe, but now goin through this dilema i realise just how good it is. great job. plz write more :)
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~moldycheesepuff Apr 6, 2004, 4:08:25 PM
But all I ever wanted was you

I see you as I'm running
You're standing in the street
I try to slow before you
But I just can't stop my feet

You make no attempt to stop me
Putting your head down in shame
I look back to see you calling
Someone elses name

The cool fall air bites my skin
As the day falls oh to fast
I run into my future
To try to forget...
My past.....



wow man.... VERY good... very relatable... i know exactly wot you mean...... thats really a powerful poem man.... really, GREAT job, i really like it!

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"If I leave here tomorrow. Will you still remember me?"
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~Reod Oct 6, 2005, 9:29:37 PM
Bravado!
Great job, Well written.
I dont like alot of poems that ryme but this is exquisite.
+Fav

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